bohemian flats and back
Cooler this morning. Hooray! Sunny, fall-like. Had been planning to run 8 or 9 miles today, almost all the way to downtown, but the road was closed, and the turn around point was less than 4 miles, so 7+ miles was all I did. I still feel good about it. I’m building up distance. My goal is to be able to do about 20-25 miles a week, with one long (about 10 mile) run.
10 Things I Noticed
- The leaves are turning, mostly yellow, a few slashes of red, one all-orange tree
- Under the Franklin Bridge I started smelling smoke–I think the walker up ahead of me had a cigarette in their hand
- Lots of acorns littering the trail
- Honking geese. I couldn’t see them, but I heard them, high in the sky as I ran near the turn off for the West Bank of the U
- More geese taking over the walking part of the path beside the flats parking lot. A dozen or so. No honking or hissing, thankfully
- The river sparkling in the sun and the silhouette of a person fishing below the bridge
- A truck rumbling over the Washington Ave bridge as I crossed under it
- The newly repaired steps, near the railroad trestle, inviting me to take the lower trail — too many bugs!
- A walker listening to the news on the radio, a reporter mentioning Germany and riots or protests or something like that
- The solid white line that separates the biking and walking path in the flats is wearing off in one stretch — will they repaint it this fall?
After finishing my run, I listened to a recording of me reciting the latest poem I am writing/revising. I listened to it about 5 times, and did a voice memo with my revisions: 1. make the rhyme of land stand sand be less obvious, 2. which flows more slowly, slowly spreads or spreads slowly?, and 3. change the word “land” at the end to rock. Here’s my updated version:
AFTERGLOW/ Sara Lynne Puotinen
Reaching the big beach
for a final time
land’s logic returns
too soon. Unsteady
I stand then drop down
kneeling in wet sand
waiting for tired legs
to remember how
to be vertical.
Muscles are grateful
happy to be used.
A delicious ache
slowly spreads not pain
or heat but glowing
& Shoulders. We are
pleased with our effort.
We feel confident
strong. Enough. More than
Too big to fit in
this lake. No longer
wanting to be water
formless fluid but
the rock that contains
it. Solid defined
giving shape to the (its?) flow.
I’m also not sure of the punctuation or if I should change the line breaks. So far, I’ve been using 5 beats per line. How would it work if I changed where each link broke?